For writing we had to make a recount what we remembered very well I hope this will you hook you into my story I have made. If it hooks you in send feedback and I may make a part 2!
I found it hard to think of what I could remember very well.
I found it easy to write down what I remembered and how to make it into sentences.
Next time I will try and make a second part for you to see what happened next.
Kia ora. I am Sam from St Mary’s School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you described the jetski and the shark chasing you, It definitely hooked me in and I look forward to reading what happens in part two.
I learnt that you know how to write good hooks.
Maybe you could have more than one shark and more creatures in your next part,like a jellyfish that stings.
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Sam
Kia ora Sam,
DeleteThank you for your comment,
While I was making this it happened in my pool not at the ocean and the jet ski's were inflatable riders, Also I might make a part two if I can because I am working on a animation called Shark animation 5 which will be coming out probably during the school holidays.
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